Winter
The frost tingling on my face.My body shivering like a bowl jelly.
Feet so red that my feet are going to explode like TNT.
My backyard is covered in fog outside like a smoke boom exploding.
My fireplace dazzling in the cozy warm lounge.
My hands are numb like an ice cube with frosting flying in the gloomy sky.
My ears are as cold as a dark rainy cloud.
My blanket is flufffy like a cat.
great job on your poem mana excellent words and excitement in it just check if it makes sense
ReplyDeleteI like how you have big word that mean a lot of things
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